You
wake up, go to the bathroom and look at the mirror… This
is a daily ritual to you, me and to everyone before starting our day… but today,
I want you to know how my ritual changed my day or… my life? I am still dazed... is this a
dream? Or is it really happening???
I woke up. Went
to the bathroom. Looked at the mirror. ‘Hmm, I must shave today...’. Had a quick
shower. In my best outfit, I kick started my pulsar. Mom’s voice sounded at a
distant… 'Rahul.....' I was too excited to hear what she said... With a super fast ride, I reached the college road… Spotted my angel at a distance in a stunning white churidhar… she
waved at me and flashed her charming smile. I felt like flying up in the air.
All went blank but her beautiful face… A happy dream, I never want to wake
up from…
But I wake
up. Go to the bathroom. Looking at the mirror, sleepily. :-o Shocked… there’s no
reflection… Rubbed my eyes and gazed, but still empty. Tried to wipe the mirror but seeing my hand goes through it, ‘Eek..!’ I let a shrill cry. Scared to death, I pulled my hands and hurried out bewilderingly… Wish I get up from
my sleep and end this eerie nightmare. Feeling a sharp pain inside my head, I stare down at me lying in the hospital bed with injured head after the tragic bike
accident… Its too late to listen to my mom's words…
'......Wear Your Helmet'
"Wear your helmet" A good message here! Nice story Rat :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Valli.. :)
DeleteShort and sweet, Too late to hear your mom's words... Nicely penned DO write more..
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot. and welcome to my space, Aparna.
Deletehopefully I will get some spark to write some stories, for a decent read.. :)
It was quite impressive the way you made your character speak through his dreams...or whatever it was...sort of 'Inception' moment...went over my tiny head.... I'm not good enough to judge your story...
ReplyDeletePS- By the way, '55 word fiction' is 55 words or less. So, it can be 54. But not 56!
I am glad in a way you found it in an Inception way. It does add some sense to my straightforward story (?!).
DeleteThanks Rats, for the visit.. :-)
Tell me something. How have u put an anti-copy tool there? U see, if someone tries to copy, then he can't coz a notif appears saying function disabled. Tell me how to do it plz.
DeleteWell, there is this code i found it online to disable the right click option in the blogger.. check this link.. you will know it better.
Deletehttp://www.allblogtools.com/tricks-and-hacks/disable-right-click-on-bloggerblogspot/
Hi Hi Hi. Right now, I am just so so so grateful towards you Rat. Thanks for this help. I alwez feared someone wud copy my stuff and I wud never be able to publish the stories in a book. You are wonderfully good, my nibbling friend. Go to my blog and see what I did there :))
DeleteMe too just wrote a story on this theme....thanks to u
ReplyDeleteyou're welcome. i read your story and it was good.
DeleteOh! You got me with the end! You should try your hand on stories more often.
ReplyDeleteThanks Meenakshi. Btw, congrats on your Liebster :-)
Deletewow...wonderful write-up...i'll try the "55 fiction" too..:D
ReplyDeletedo check out my post :)
http://meowconnect.blogspot.in/2013/01/not-your-juliet-really.html
Thanks alot, meow :-) A Cat in Rat's space. Welcome to my home :-)
Deleteshort and crisp..message delivered....! nice..
ReplyDeleteThanks Little Princess. Welcome to my palace :-)
Deletenice one good message delivered :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Vinisha. Welcome to my blog with a :-)
DeleteIt indeed is a wow post! Short, simple and straight forward. Who said u cant write stories? You do and you write well and with a message too :)
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I am glad you liked it, Ekta. and yeah i guess i started exploring my new side ;-) hoping to give a good read to all. Thanks dear, have a great week. :-)
DeleteHi,
ReplyDeleteWow, that was even better F55, I must admit. You finished it off on a good note, many people take life for granted and rely more on Heroics and stunts on the road. Good take on the prompt.
Go ahead and nibble on my entry for Get Published :)
Regards
Jay
My Blog | My Entry to Indiblogger Get Published
Yea that's true, Jay, nowadays they are too easy with the rash driving. Glad you liked it.
DeleteAnd I nibbled your entry on the Get Published and found it was quite a story. All the best!
I havent' read too much 55 word fiction stories, but very nice rat! Good message too
ReplyDeleteThanks Saro. Glad you dropped by :-) Have a great week ahead.
DeleteImportant message.
ReplyDeleteBut I think you should modify the opening sentence of your post, as specified by the WOW rules.
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Yeah but i have read few other previous entries with small changes in the first line but stick to the prompt. thats why i started this way. anyways, thanks for pointing out. i ll keep this in mind in my further wow write ups :-) much appreciated.. Thanks for dropping by.
DeleteA little changes done! i guess now its as per the WoW rules :-)
Deletehehe...."wear you helmet" nice...very nice :)
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Thanks a lot, Priya.. welcome to my home :-)
Deleteoh...this leaves a good message in the end! Nice one, little rat:)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, ma'm... i am delighted that you dropped by :-)
Deletegood one :)
ReplyDeletethanks Ashwin. am glad it comes from a wonderful narrator like you :)
Deletewelcome to my home :)