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20 Jan 2013

A Dreamer


You wake up, go to the bathroom and look at the mirror… This is a daily ritual to you, me and to everyone before starting our day… but today, I want you to know how my ritual changed my day or… my life? I am still dazed... is this a dream? Or is it really happening???

I woke up. Went to the bathroom. Looked at the mirror. ‘Hmm, I must shave today...’. Had a quick shower. In my best outfit, I kick started my pulsar. Mom’s voice sounded at a distant… 'Rahul.....' I was too excited to hear what she said... With a super fast ride, I reached the college road… Spotted my angel at a distance in a stunning white churidhar… she waved at me and flashed her charming smile. I felt like flying up in the air. All went blank but her beautiful face… A happy dream, I never want to wake up from…

But I wake up. Go to the bathroom. Looking at the mirror, sleepily. :-o Shocked… there’s no reflection… Rubbed my eyes and gazed, but still empty. Tried to wipe the mirror but seeing my hand goes through it, ‘Eek..!’  I let a shrill cry. Scared to death, I pulled my hands and hurried out bewilderingly… Wish I get up from my sleep and end this eerie nightmare. Feeling a sharp pain inside my head, I stare down at me lying in the hospital bed with injured head after the tragic bike accident… Its too late to listen to my mom's words…

 '......Wear Your Helmet'
This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda
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34 comments:

  1. Sri Valli20 January 2013 at 14:58

    "Wear your helmet" A good message here! Nice story Rat :)

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  2. Aparna Sinha20 January 2013 at 15:05

    Short and sweet, Too late to hear your mom's words... Nicely penned DO write more..

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    1. a Rat20 January 2013 at 21:54

      Thanks a lot. and welcome to my space, Aparna.

      hopefully I will get some spark to write some stories, for a decent read.. :)

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  3. Ritesh Agarwal20 January 2013 at 23:07

    It was quite impressive the way you made your character speak through his dreams...or whatever it was...sort of 'Inception' moment...went over my tiny head.... I'm not good enough to judge your story...

    PS- By the way, '55 word fiction' is 55 words or less. So, it can be 54. But not 56!

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    1. a Rat22 January 2013 at 00:04

      I am glad in a way you found it in an Inception way. It does add some sense to my straightforward story (?!).

      Thanks Rats, for the visit.. :-)

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    2. Ritesh Agarwal22 January 2013 at 00:28

      Tell me something. How have u put an anti-copy tool there? U see, if someone tries to copy, then he can't coz a notif appears saying function disabled. Tell me how to do it plz.

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    3. a Rat22 January 2013 at 12:26

      Well, there is this code i found it online to disable the right click option in the blogger.. check this link.. you will know it better.

      http://www.allblogtools.com/tricks-and-hacks/disable-right-click-on-bloggerblogspot/

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    4. Ritesh Agarwal22 January 2013 at 13:59

      Hi Hi Hi. Right now, I am just so so so grateful towards you Rat. Thanks for this help. I alwez feared someone wud copy my stuff and I wud never be able to publish the stories in a book. You are wonderfully good, my nibbling friend. Go to my blog and see what I did there :))

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  4. Ritesh Agarwal21 January 2013 at 00:08

    Me too just wrote a story on this theme....thanks to u

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    1. a Rat22 January 2013 at 00:06

      you're welcome. i read your story and it was good.

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  5. Meenakshi Malhotra21 January 2013 at 08:37

    Oh! You got me with the end! You should try your hand on stories more often.

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    1. a Rat22 January 2013 at 00:11

      Thanks Meenakshi. Btw, congrats on your Liebster :-)

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  6. Snuffles Jay21 January 2013 at 10:06

    wow...wonderful write-up...i'll try the "55 fiction" too..:D

    do check out my post :)
    http://meowconnect.blogspot.in/2013/01/not-your-juliet-really.html

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    1. a Rat22 January 2013 at 00:14

      Thanks alot, meow :-) A Cat in Rat's space. Welcome to my home :-)

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  7. the little princess21 January 2013 at 10:26

    short and crisp..message delivered....! nice..

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    1. a Rat22 January 2013 at 00:22

      Thanks Little Princess. Welcome to my palace :-)

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  8. Anonymous21 January 2013 at 11:46

    nice one good message delivered :)

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    1. a Rat22 January 2013 at 00:24

      Thanks Vinisha. Welcome to my blog with a :-)

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  9. numerounity21 January 2013 at 12:46

    It indeed is a wow post! Short, simple and straight forward. Who said u cant write stories? You do and you write well and with a message too :)
    _________
    http://ektakhetan.blogspot.in/

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    1. a Rat22 January 2013 at 00:30

      I am glad you liked it, Ekta. and yeah i guess i started exploring my new side ;-) hoping to give a good read to all. Thanks dear, have a great week. :-)

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  10. Jay Singh21 January 2013 at 21:18

    Hi,

    Wow, that was even better F55, I must admit. You finished it off on a good note, many people take life for granted and rely more on Heroics and stunts on the road. Good take on the prompt.

    Go ahead and nibble on my entry for Get Published :)

    Regards

    Jay
    My Blog | My Entry to Indiblogger Get Published

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    1. a Rat22 January 2013 at 00:38

      Yea that's true, Jay, nowadays they are too easy with the rash driving. Glad you liked it.

      And I nibbled your entry on the Get Published and found it was quite a story. All the best!

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  11. Saro21 January 2013 at 21:56

    I havent' read too much 55 word fiction stories, but very nice rat! Good message too

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    1. a Rat22 January 2013 at 00:40

      Thanks Saro. Glad you dropped by :-) Have a great week ahead.

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  12. Anupama K. Mazumder22 January 2013 at 12:31

    Important message.

    But I think you should modify the opening sentence of your post, as specified by the WOW rules.

    www.anucreations.blogspot.in

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    1. a Rat22 January 2013 at 12:55

      Yeah but i have read few other previous entries with small changes in the first line but stick to the prompt. thats why i started this way. anyways, thanks for pointing out. i ll keep this in mind in my further wow write ups :-) much appreciated.. Thanks for dropping by.

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    2. a Rat22 January 2013 at 13:20

      A little changes done! i guess now its as per the WoW rules :-)

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  13. Priyaa22 January 2013 at 22:55

    hehe...."wear you helmet" nice...very nice :)

    http://meintheblogosphere.blogspot.in/

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    1. a Rat23 January 2013 at 12:56

      Thanks a lot, Priya.. welcome to my home :-)

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  14. Panchali25 January 2013 at 09:19

    oh...this leaves a good message in the end! Nice one, little rat:)

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    1. a Rat25 January 2013 at 20:05

      Thanks a lot, ma'm... i am delighted that you dropped by :-)

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  15. Ashwin Kumar19 June 2013 at 15:06

    good one :)

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    1. a Rat21 June 2013 at 11:27

      thanks Ashwin. am glad it comes from a wonderful narrator like you :)

      welcome to my home :)

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