'Please
don't do this to me…' Maria screamed.
No one cared to listen her cry.
She felt that
inevitable moment for the first time,
Where she wasn't treated the same way as before.
Pain engulfed
her when they shut the door against her face,
And locked her in…
And locked her in…
To rest in that unfamiliar peace forever.
My God! Powerful. Leaves you wondering, almost asking for more. Love this!
ReplyDeletethank you Sakshi.. :)
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ReplyDeletehmm :(
DeleteStrong..
ReplyDeleteGreat work..
thank you Karan.
Deletevery emotional and deep
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thanks Pooja..
DeleteNice thriller !!
ReplyDeletethanks :)
DeleteBeautifull write... ;-)
ReplyDeletethanks so much Katja. keep visiting :)
DeleteOMG! that made me gasp!
ReplyDeleteam glad it made an impact.
Deletepower writing ! that what it is .. !
ReplyDeletethank you so much Ankur. :)
DeleteThis is so Intense..I can really feel the Pain.. :)
ReplyDeleteam glad it reached the audience the way i wanted it to be.. thanks a lot Harsha. :)
DeleteVery intriguing! I want more!
ReplyDeletehappy to see your comment. thank you Vashti. :)
DeleteThe last line gives you spine chills! "To rest in that unfamiliar peace forever"
ReplyDeletethat's what I wanted. thanks for dropping by..
DeleteAmazing start..want to know more!
ReplyDeleteAmazing start..want to know more!
ReplyDeletei dono if I can come up with a sequel cos i think somethings are better left unsaid. thanks a lot Swarn Priya :-)
DeleteTo rest in that unfamiliar peace forever.... that sounds very scary and chilling!
ReplyDeletethanks for reading. keep visiting. :)
DeleteA write that leaves a dark niggle at the end.
ReplyDeletethanks for reading, Suresh :)
DeleteIt is a dark poem...powerful and intriguing....leaving the reader with more questions than answers...very good rat
ReplyDeletegood to see your comment.. but i dint write as a poem but tried a 55er rats.. :)
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